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Main things i was notecing that people with makeing alot of grammar mistakes. I got some good input from people looking at my paper. They said that i needed to have more of and argument about my thoughts on my paper and i think thats a reasonable comment becuase i never really had an argument.I think ill be able to rewrite and make my final paper really well, some things i liked when reading isiahs that the whole paper he was aregueing beans size and the affect that had on him. I feal like that aspect of his paper will help me revise mine.